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 ## Spaceship Earth — A Pale Blue Dot
 ![](https://cdn.substack.com/image/fetch/w_1456,c_limit,f_auto,q_auto:good/https%3A%2F%2Fbucketeer-e05bbc84-baa3-437e-9518-adb32be77984.s3.amazonaws.com%2Fpublic%2Fimages%2Fee4a3cfc-7be3-4ca3-a19b-6ef68e824aec_672x372.jpeg)
 
-> "*Look again at that dot. That's here. That's home. That's us. On it everyone you love, everyone you know, everyone you ever heard of, every human being who ever was, lived out their lives. The aggregate of our joy and suffering, thousands of confident religions, ideologies, and economic doctrines, every hunter and forager, every hero and coward, every creator and destroyer of civilization, every king and peasant, every young couple in love, every mother and father, hopeful child, inventor and explorer, every teacher of morals, every corrupt politician, every "superstar," every "supreme leader," every saint and sinner in the history of our species lived there--on a mote of dust suspended in a sunbeam.* - Carl Sagan"
+> "*Look again at that dot. That's here. That's home. That's us. On it; everyone you love, everyone you know, everyone you ever heard of, every human being who ever was, lived out their lives. The aggregate of our joy and suffering, thousands of confident religions, ideologies, and economic doctrines, every hunter and forager, every hero and coward, every creator and destroyer of civilization, every king and peasant, every young couple in love, every mother and father, hopeful child, inventor and explorer, every teacher of morals, every corrupt politician, every "superstar," every "supreme leader," every saint and sinner in the history of our species lived there--on a mote of dust suspended in a sunbeam.* - Carl Sagan"
 
-It's time to stop treating the Earth as a pool for maximum resource extraction, leading to the collapse ecosystem collapse, and start treating it as our common home. Take the meta view, and see Earth as a speck of dust, a pale blue dot in a vast universe - and stop shitting where you eat.
+It's time to stop treating the Earth as a pool for maximum resource extraction, edging us closer ecosystem' collapse, and start treating it as our only home. To take the meta view, see Earth as a pale blue dot in a vast universe - and stop shitting where we eat.